Here is progress 7 of my pre viz, over the weekend I got together shots for my montage and have attempted to put it together, I am not happy with the montage just yet as I want to have some split screens at some point and maybe an opacity drop of Doris searching over a shot of Fred trying to escape from the cupboard or doing chores.
UPDATE: After a tutorial with Phil today, there's improvements to be made and more opportunities to be taken with my storytelling. I'm more aware now that something I struggle with is understanding what an audience needs when watching my film and I need to put myself in the shoes of someone completely new to my project watching it for the first time.
At the moment my pre viz comes across like Doris is searching for Fred the next day and that its not weeks/months that have passed in all, to show the passing of time better I could for example: show the seasons change out the window, or a flower pot that gradually wilts, or a tree changing in the seasons, or a clock, or newspaper dates etc. Phil introduced me to something called 'pathetic fallacy' which is for example, how the human moods affect the weather which I've already exhibited in the first shot where he is sad therefore it's raining, but I should/could feature it more throughout.
Also the scene where they are separated needs to be more traumatising for both of them, I knew before I wanted this to be a heart wrenching traumatic scene but it's gonna take me some time to get there and I'm slowly learning what power a film maker has and what I can do. I imagined Doris as being very obedient but it comes across like she knew and had expected to be separated from Fred which I don't think was the case and would be more effective for the story if she didn't. I'm going to revisit Act 1 to a) make the separation scene more traumatising for the characters (someone in the background could be putting a ticking clock on this scene by telling Doris to leave) b) put a propaganda posted on the chuch wall about taking in evacuaees and c) build up more before the church scene the closeness and strenght of Doris's and Fred's sibling bond.
At the moment my pre viz comes across like Doris is searching for Fred the next day and that its not weeks/months that have passed in all, to show the passing of time better I could for example: show the seasons change out the window, or a flower pot that gradually wilts, or a tree changing in the seasons, or a clock, or newspaper dates etc. Phil introduced me to something called 'pathetic fallacy' which is for example, how the human moods affect the weather which I've already exhibited in the first shot where he is sad therefore it's raining, but I should/could feature it more throughout.
Also the scene where they are separated needs to be more traumatising for both of them, I knew before I wanted this to be a heart wrenching traumatic scene but it's gonna take me some time to get there and I'm slowly learning what power a film maker has and what I can do. I imagined Doris as being very obedient but it comes across like she knew and had expected to be separated from Fred which I don't think was the case and would be more effective for the story if she didn't. I'm going to revisit Act 1 to a) make the separation scene more traumatising for the characters (someone in the background could be putting a ticking clock on this scene by telling Doris to leave) b) put a propaganda posted on the chuch wall about taking in evacuaees and c) build up more before the church scene the closeness and strenght of Doris's and Fred's sibling bond.
After this bit I plan for Fred to be outside smelling food from the window or for him to be resting against the stone wall, Doris comes along and sits on the other side of this wall at her lowest point too, on the verge of giving up and that she'll never find her brother. When Fred steals milk from the float is when I plan on Doris finding him, she catches him in the act and goes to touch him or give him a hug which he flinches at and doesn't want to be touched, Doris just sits with him and offers him the last little bit of chocolate she has left.
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